"God and nature do not work together in vain”

[adonais]

The meter is horribly odd, I know. 

Suggestions to improve the work?

I'm an old school guy, and I do like the challenge of writing verse on a specific meter. Free verse is pretty much the name of the game today, but I still enjoy reading an old-fashioned ode or ballad stanza or iambic pentameter sonnet, so I would have tried to write it on such a meter with a rhyming scheme. Perhaps a Keatsian ode form would have been a good format for your verse. Just my 2c.